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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job Write a letter to this friend. In your letter •Say why he/she would not enjoy going college •Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her •Suggest the types of jobs that would be suitable for him/her

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Dear Marjona , My name is Mahliyo . How are you ? I hope you are very excellent . I received a letter from my friend asking for advice on whether to go college or try to get a job for a late . College is a very modern place in the around the world . First and foremost importantly , colleges have been teaching some kind of jobs for 4years . At
this
 time , they were good places for knowledge .But , nowadays , it is a bad site
as well as
 it is a waste of time to go of it and sit at the table in of it .
This
 is because teachers are not a knowledgeable and perfect person so, they do not teach any subjects . Pupils do not enjoy
this
 site . In my perspective, people are getting a job is a good idea for her . At the time , students prefer to work and they take some experience and get some money . One of them is teachers teacher ,a banker and others . I look forward to your reply and a resolution to all issues. Yours faithfully, Mahliyo
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Logical structure
Develop a clear structure in your letter with an appropriate opening, well-organized body paragraphs, and a proper closing. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea to maintain coherence.
Logical structure
Use appropriate and varied transitions to connect ideas smoothly and maintain the flow of your letter.
Greeting and closing
Include suitable greeting and closing, but ensure that the remainder of the letter remains formal and adheres to the task prompts.
Task response
Ensure that the response fully addresses all parts of the task with sufficient detail and relevant examples.
Writing tone
Adopt a consistent, formal tone throughout the letter appropriate for the context of giving advice to a friend.
Single idea per paragraph
Use paragraphing to separate distinct points and ideas clearly. Begin with an introductory paragraph, followed by separate paragraphs for each point, and conclude with a final paragraph summarizing your advice or reiterating the main points.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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