Some people think that money is one of the most essential factors in promoting happiness. Do you think people can be happy without much money? What factors contribute towards Happiness?

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In the times we live
money
is an essential in our life
wich
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which
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we need on almost everything
for example
food,healthcare or any other Items we need.
Money
can solve a lot of problems as well and you can get freedom when you have
money
.I was born
in
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a wealthy family but my dad was very poor when he grew up
this
is because my grandpa spent all his
money
during his lifetime.My dad always tells me that when he was younger he was thinking about
money
all the time because he wanted to buy himself the things he always wanted.Since I was a bit older and understood more about
money
he told me that
money
can make you happy when you don’t have
money
but when you are rich it can even cause a lot of problems.When you have a certain amount of
money
there’s not really much you can buy except a few cars,watches or houses.When you can buy anything you want I think it can be very boring because you are not going to be as satisfied as if you had no
money
and you would get something nice.
This
is because
money
doesn’t really have a value anymore.That’s why my dad would not get me anything I
want
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because If I
would have
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everything I would start to get bored very fast.So
money
can solve problems and get you a lot of happiness but only temporarily.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Promoting happiness
  • Essential factors
  • Financial stability
  • Material wealth
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Contentment
  • Basic needs
  • Maslow's hierarchy of needs
  • Social connections
  • Pursuing passions
  • Well-being
  • Mental health
  • Spiritual practices
  • Personal growth
  • Community service
  • Societal contribution
  • Philanthropy
  • Joy
  • Satisfaction
  • Prosperity
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