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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

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Being a good
member
 of
society
 can mean different things to different
people
.
This
 since,
there
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 is no strict definition of a ‘good
member
 of
society
‘ and some might have higher or lower standards of the same for a number of reasons.
Children
 tend to pick up and learn concepts extremely fast and for the primitive years of their lives, their
parents
 are the ones teaching them basic life skills all the way from talking and walking to eating. Some of these are not physically ‘taught’ per
say
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se
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 but rather, picked up by copying or mirroring their
parents
.
Hence
,
parents
 might not have to literally teach their
children
 how to be nice, good members of
society
 but rather, be admirable
people
 themselves which shows
children
 that, it’s just a normal decent thing to be ‘good members of
society
’ and they don’t have to put in
effort
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 or have it be an inconvenience thinking about how to be good.
On the contrary
,
children
 will be
children
 and
hence
 they might take time and effort
understanding
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 the difference between good and bad and why
that is
 the case. All
parents
 might not have the time and energy to always be correcting their
children
 which leads to the thought of
school
. After a certain age, all
children
 spend the majority of their days in
school
 surrounded by students similar to them.
This
 is when
parents
 cannot control and correct everything they do.
This
 is when some
people
 believe that
school
 is the place in which
children
 should be thought to be good members of
society
. Being surrounded by a lot of
people
 would be a good opportunity to teach the
children
 how to act in
functioning
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society
 which would of course be different to if they were in their own homes in familiar situations.
Overall
, in my opinion, I think that being a good
member
 of
society
 should not just be taught but rather integrated
in
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children
’s lives both in
school
 and at home. It is important not to isolate
school
 and home to different behaviours and terms of what is acceptable as
,
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 being a good
member
 of
society
 has to stem from inside. To be a good
member
 it is not only about what happens in the outside world but
also
 behind closed doors. Teaching in both places would help them understand the importance of it and how it impacts
others
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others'
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 lives
as well as
 their own.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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