In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people . Why might be the case? Positive or negative situation? Relevant example including ?

In some countries , ownership of a
house
matter for different kind of
people
.
while
it has
the
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advantages and disadvantageous
people
will prefer not to
rent
a
house
instead
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and instead
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have their own
house
.
Home ownership
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Homeownership
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has an essential importance for some , as it is thought that if they have their own place to live
which
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it
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is considered as their property worth more than renting it. In other
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word
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people
feel more comfortable
while
they are living
in
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their own land which was bought
.
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Besides
besides
that home owners are not worried about
rent
or mortgage
payment
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payments
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which is a major headache for some.
In addition
,scratches on a wall will not be
problem
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a problem
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anymore.
While
it seems like being convenient and relaxed way of living by not paying monthly
rent
or
rising
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raising
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the amount ,
individual
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individuals
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will face various challenges
.other
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Other
kind
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kinds
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of financial troubles are the consequence of
this
lifestyle
such
as dedication
of
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to
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tax
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taxes
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,
house
market crash and so far.
Moreover
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of
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the most significant psychological effect is that it might be boring after years and changing is not as
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much
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as flexible
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in
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renting .
for
instance
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we have lived in a villa for roughly
over
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10 years and
then
recently
change
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our
house
and didn`t buy it
instead
we prefer to
rent
it as a way of
modifiying
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modifying
the
monotones
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house
we used to have. In conclusion ,
people
have different
taste
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,
although
ownership
is
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sound
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grat
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great
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for some , others might highlight
disadvantageous
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the disadvantageous
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and choose to
rent
a
house
with it`s drawbacks .
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