The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given scheme demonstrates the average temperatures during the year in the three cities, namely,
Paris
,
Sydney
and
Dubai
.
Overall
,
obviously
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the hottest city among the three given was
Dubai
,
whereas
in
Paris
and
Sydney
temperature
was unstable throughout the observed timeline. In January, the
temperature
in
Paris
was the coldest, which accounted for 5
degrees
Celsius
and was almost one-fifth of the
temperature
that was observed in
Sydney
. By May, the figure that indicated the
temperature
in
Paris
had increased substantially,
whereas
the data that
demonstarted
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demonstrated
the
temperature
in
Sydney
declined considerably,
however
, in May these figures equalized and the
temperature
in these areas was the same, specifically, 15
degrees
Celsius
. Regarding the climate in
Dubai
, the hottest month was August and the
temperature
there reached its peak at just over 35
degrees
Celsius
, which was approximately two times as much as the
temperature
in
Paris
and about 3 times as much as the
temperature
in
Sydney
during the same month. By the end of the observed timeline, namely, by December there were similar patterns concerning the temperatures in
Dubai
and
Sydney
, which constituted about 24
degrees
Celsius
each.
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