The diagram below shows the production of olive oil.

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The diagram illustrates the steps involved in the oil production.

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, There are 7 stages of making oil, from picking olives from the farmers to the distribution stage.

The first step is

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that the olives are picked by workers, and

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put into the baskets. By means of the special machine, they are rinsed with water, which helps to clean the dirt. After the rinsing stage, they are put on the belt in order to be smashed.

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, the final products, which are the olive paste and olive stones are obtained. From

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point,

this

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paste is put into the bags with holes.

Next,

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these bags are pressed by special equipment. After being pressed, the bags with holes go to the machine, where oil is separated from the water.

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, the end product goes to the storage, where it can be distributed to the shops and sales as well.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 9.0

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3 paragraphs

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Topic Vocabulary:

Harvesting
Ripe
Sorting
Crushing
Paste
Grinding stones
Steel blades
Pressing
Extraction
Liquids
Centrifuged
Settle
Purified
Distribution
Olive trees
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The diagram below shows the production of olive oil.

Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

Some sceientists believe that in the future computers will be more intelligent than human beings. while some see this as a positive development others worry about the negative consequences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that the government is responsible for crime prevention. Others think that it is individuals responsibility to protect themselves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

News editors decide what to broadcast on Television and what to write in newspapers. What factors influence those decisions? Do you think we become used to bad news? Should more good news be reported?

You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter Describe the item Explain where and when you left it Say what action you would like the company to take Write at least 150 words.