The diagram below shows the production of olive oil.
The diagram illustrates the steps involved in the oil production.
Overall
, There are 7 stages of making
oil, from picking olives from the farmers to the distribution stage. The first step is
that the olives are picked by workers, and then
put into the baskets. By means of the special machine, they are rinsed with water, which helps to clean the dirt. After the rinsing stage, they are put on the belt in order to be smashed. As a result
, the final products, which are the olive paste and olive stones are obtained.
From this
point, this
paste is put into the bags with holes. Next,
these bags are pressed by special equipment. After being pressed, the bags with holes go to the machine, where oil is separated from the water. Finally
, the end product goes to the storage, where it can be distributed to the shops and sales as well.Submitted by aida.ai2000 on
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