SOME SAY YOU SHOULD ALWAYS MARR FOR LOVE; OTHERS SAY THAT IN AN UNCERTAIN WORLLD IT IS WISER TO MARRY FOR MONEY. DISCUSS BOTH POINTS OF VIEW AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

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Nowadays there are two points of view when it comes to
marriage
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.Some
people
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believe you should always prefer to choose someone that you
love
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to marry,
while
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others believe we are living in
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uncertain world and we should pick
money
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over
love
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.In
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both sides will be discussed and an opinion will be provided in conclusion . On the one hand, there are
people
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who always stick with the person that they
love
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and do not
care
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about their financial income , they believe
marriage
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should not
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on each
others
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money
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and the decision
on marrying
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should
be depending
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on how much we
love
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our partners.
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, the popular football player Ronaldo
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married
with
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a woman who
is
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used to work as a waitress before they got married her income
was depending
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depended
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on how many
people
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she
has
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served which
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she was not earning that much and
this
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situation made
people
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believe
ronaldo
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did not
care
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about
money
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and married because he loved her.And a lot of individuals take
this
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love
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story as their hope and these kind of stories make them believe
love
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actually exists.And with the person we
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love
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it can lead us to be more happy and feel more safe .
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, others believe now with
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this
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uncertainties
people
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we
love
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can change and marriages should
be depending
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on financial purposes.To illustrate there is
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research done in 2020 by scientists that
been
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proved 88% of our population end their marriages
due to
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financial issues.To illustrate, in most
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women do not work so that they can take
care
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of their houses and do chores
such
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as cleaning,cooking or even taking
care
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of their children which means that they can not commit
on
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to
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working in other jobs so that they can gain salary and in most cases especially if the couple have a child just the male parent income is not enough so
people
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believe the choice to make on marrying someone should be depending on
money
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. In conclusion, my opinion on the matter is that nowadays it is hard to find the person we
love
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and we should always make a choice
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considering how much we
love
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our partner.
However
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,
money
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is an important factor for
marriage
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in order to sustain a
marriage
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.
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