GLOBAL WARMING IS INCREASING DAY BY DAY. WHAT EFFECTS DOES THIS PHENOMENON CAUSES ? WHAT ARE THE SOLUTION

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The depletion of the ozone layer is growing at an alarming rate. There are many consequences to
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essay will discuss some of those consequences and present a possible solution to tackle
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the end.
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, the world is witnessing 'climate change'
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of the rapid rise in temperature, which is producing catastrophic effects.
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with, most
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are facing different and harsh weather than usual, which is ultimately damaging their agriculture and more.
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, the hurricanes in Bangladesh are bigger than usual which leads to massive disruptions in their food production. Though some
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witness these effects more than others; the evidence of climate change is clear.
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, the sea levels are rising as ice glaciers continue to melt
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the increased global heat.
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,
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is directly affecting certain
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. To illustrate, the Tuvalu nation may be completely submerged underwater in a few years' time,
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their foreign minister made a plea to the international community. Other
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will be joining Tuvalu including Bangladesh if nothing is done to address
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issue.
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, global warming is causing the climate to change
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an increase in sea level. Both these effects are detrimental to the environment and potentially harmful to humans. States have the duty to implement solutions and one of them may be to control the use of greenhouse gases that are responsible for breaking the ozone layer. Strong regulations of energy control must be enforced in order to help bring down the atmospheric temperature.
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, the world may be locking its own unfortunate fate.
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Task Response
Your essay addresses the topic of the depletion of the ozone layer and its consequences. You have provided some relevant examples to support your points, but more detailed examples could enhance your arguments further.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are well-structured and effectively introduce the topic and summarize the main points. However, ensure to maintain consistency in providing detailed examples throughout the essay to improve coherence and cohesion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • greenhouse gases
  • renewable energy
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • heatwaves
  • droughts
  • coastal communities
  • methane
  • nitrous oxide
  • sustainable agriculture
  • global cooperation
  • environmental policies
  • conservation
  • sustainable living
  • habitat
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