The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010
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The graph illustrates the comparison of three bread shops' yearly income in Calgary from 2000 to 2010. It's clear that the bakeries have increased sales in ten years except the Mari Bakeshop which significantly decreased in earnings by the end of 2010. Both Amandine Bakery and Bolo Cakery show the same trend
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because they are gradually raising the amount of products sold out.
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, the difference between these two stores is Bolo Cakery slightly fell in 2002 to $20,000 from approximately $25,000 in 2001, whilst Amandine Bakery stagnantly kept rocketing income from above $55,000 in 2000 to around $105,000 in 2010.
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, Mari Bakeshop had remarkably the highest income by $80,000 in 2000 compared to other shops.
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it had the lowest earnings by $40,000, the bakery still had its golden era when it reached $90,000 in product sales in 2001 and 2004. After that, the number of its buyers slowly went down.
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