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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The two maps illustrate how rural areas have changed from 1930 to 2010 at Stokeford.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that there are
a
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huge differences
such
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 as farmland and primary school. In 1930, the village was most likely full of farmland with a lot of cows and shops, but during the next 30 years, the town experienced a number of dramatic changes.
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, the most noticeable part is that the farmland east of the River Stoke was replaced by the home of residence.
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, the primary school was expanded to a bigger building
on
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 the same place which was located
in
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east of the Post Office. In 2010, a mansion in the east that has a big garden was reconstructed to be a retirement home. On the other side, along the road from South to North, there were a lot of houses that
very
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 full until
comes
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it came
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 to the bridge. In
additions
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, there was
also
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 a rectangular road which surrounded the new house.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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