The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010
The presented line graph demonstrates the earnings of three various bakeries in one specific place,Calgary for ten
years
starting from 2000.
To commence,the first thing that can be observed is Amandine Bakery have remained stable figures for five years
starting from 2010 and the yearly income that this
bakery had was below 60000$.After 2005 there is not a considerable change till 2007. After that there is
a rise in just a year after that in 2010 the figures Wrong verb form
was
have
peeked.It can be said that Amandine bakery Unnecessary verb
apply
have
remained the same for a long time Change the verb form
has
However
, in the last
years
it has the
highest earnings among Add a missing verb
had the
other
two Correct article usage
the other
bakereries
.Mari bakeshop Correct your spelling
bakeries
have
started with the highest income, which was 80000$.There Unnecessary verb
apply
are
some slight increases Wrong verb form
have been
in
over the Change preposition
apply
years
. Neverthless
,in 2009 the earnings Correct your spelling
Nevertheless
have
dropped to 40000$ and remained the same till 2010. Bolo Cakery started with the lowest income, which is 20000$.Till 2003 there are not any dramatic differences.Between 2030 and 2006 the incomes have stayed still after 2007 there is a Unnecessary verb
apply
rose
and Bolo cakery Replace the word
rise
have
outnumbered Mari bakeshop.Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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