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Some people believe that it is best to do same type of work throughout your lives. Others feel that it is beneficial to change jobs often. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some think that working in the same workplace for their whole life is better,
while
 others think it is better to
change
jobs
 frequently.
Although
 working in the same
organisation
 improves efficiency, I believe that changing
jobs
 can be beneficial and have numerous money-related benefits because they get more hikes in their payroll. On the one hand, working in the same company can lead to fast work with fewer errors.
This
 is because employees get insight into the
organisation
, and
as a result
, they would be able to do work efficiently.
For instance
, in research, it was found that employees who
change
jobs
 frequently have less working speed as compared to those who stay in the same
organisation
.
However
, I believe that there is less increase in payroll.
On the other hand
, workers get more hikes when they
change
jobs
 frequently.
In other words
, they ask for a higher percentage increase in remuneration from their new employer because the percentage increase in salary is always greater when shifting from one company to another.
For example
, in India, on average, employees get at least a Ten per cent extra hike from their new employer plus a joining bonus.
Therefore
, I opine that, for a worker financial benefits are always superior to any other benefit. In conclusion, some say that it is better to stay in one
organisation
whereas
 others believe people should
change
jobs
 frequently.
Although
 staying in the same company can improve efficiency, in my opinion, there are more financial benefits in changing
jobs
 frequently.
Submitted by KaranAwal15 on

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language
Try to avoid repetition of phrases such as 'change jobs frequently'. Use synonyms to express the same meaning.
style
Avoid the overuse of personal pronouns like 'I'. To give your writing a more formal tone, use passive voice or other structures.
content
The phrase 'numerous money-related benefits' seems too vague. Try to specify these benefits when you make such statements.
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