The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities.
The provided line chart illustrates the variation in the weather temperatures by
Celsius
unit for specific three significant cities Paris
, Dubai
, and Sydney
during year seasons.
Overall
, It is evident that Dubai
and Sydney
outline almost the nearest temperature
in the winter while
Paris
constitutes the coldest weather, albeit Paris
and Dubai
similarly
depict upward and downward patterns.
To begin
with, in the first months, Sydney
contributes the highest degree at approximately 25 temperature
Celsius
, then
superseded by Dubai
in March. Dubai
increased to around 23 temperature
Celsius
after being at almost 20 temperature
Celsius
. After that, the pattern is reversed, while
Dubai
shows a constant upsurge to hit the peak point at just over 35 degrees in August, Sydney
experienced a dramatic decline even surpassed by Paris
at 15 Celsius
, after it was at merely 5 temperature
to register a consistent growing ,bringing Sydney
to the lowest level over the summer season and Paris
shoot higher degree to remain at 20 celsius
.
Conversely
, the second half of the year demonstrates a sharp contrast. Dubai
, Paris
, and Sydney
again record the constant tendency to return back at the same starting temperature
degree at the end
of the year with the turn of the winter season.Submitted by alaan0542 on
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