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In the coming years, almost every type of transportation means will be automatic without the operators and all the individuals moving to other stations will only be travelers. From my perspective, this technology has fewer benefits because, without an expert driver, there are chances of accidents, and this may be a time-consuming way of transport.

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In the coming years, almost every type of transportation means will be automatic without the operators and all the individuals moving to other stations will only be travelers. From my perspective,
this
 technology has fewer benefits because, without an expert driver, there are chances of accidents, and
this
 may be a
time
-consuming way of transport. First of all vehicles with self-driving technology cause serious problems
due to
 an error in the automation system of the autonomous vehicle's engine there are likely more chances of accidents that result in less safety and security to the lives of the passengers
traveling
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 through it. Because the drivers are highly skilled technicians and know about any technical default in the motor engine, they tackle the issue without having any emergency alert.
Whereas
 automated means of transport require
time
 to call an expert technician to resolve nonfunctional engines.
Secondly
, the robotic vehicles follow the instructions that are fed into their memory, so there are chances of
time
 consumption for
travelers
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For example
, for professionals who have to reach their workplace on
time
, these unmanned means of transportation are not suitable for them because the controller unit has limited the robotic
cars
 to follow guidelines
as a result
 more
time
 is consumed, and individuals may get late from working spot In conclusion,
due to
 the increased number of vehicles,
although
 autonomous
cars
 will be enhanced in the coming days,
this
 can not underestimate the power of manned
cars
 as they have their status. It is recommended that individuals should try driverless
cars
 to get familiar with them.
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