The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram presented the process of reusing
plastic
bottles.
This
cycle is provided in nine stages which is unique. At the first of the
cycle
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people throw litter in boxes.
The next step is
gathering all the litter and
carry
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to the recycling department where workers divide
them
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in
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two parts, one part is special for
plastic
and
on
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the other side is
different
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material. Over the next step,
plastic
is pressed into blocks which are imported in another stage . In order to clean
plastic
, it is important to wash
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by
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a liquid cleaner
such
as water. After washing plastics it put inside a machine which is split into small pieces. After providing small material they are ready to put in the heating oven.
Finally
, raw material is available for producers who require these materials. Producers are able to manufacture plenty of products
such
as
short
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or
pencil
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pencils
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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