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You have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centres in your country all look very similar to each other. You don’t fully agree with this opinion. Write a letter to the editor of the newspaper. In your letter -say which points in the article you agree with -explain ways in which your town centre is different from most other town centres -offer to give a guide tour of your town to the writer of the article Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 letter to make a comment on your article in a national newspaper. I agree with your opinion that all the
town
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 centres in my country are pretty old and the structures of each department
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 similar.
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, I believe the
apprearance
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appearance
 of the building is different in my
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. The
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 centre in my
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 represents a castle which is a symbol of
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town
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. Thanks to
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 unique feature, a lot of tourists visit
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town
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 centre, which is
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 different from most other ones. Not only the
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 centre
,
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 but there are
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 some symbolic buildings in my area and I would like you to write an article
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 my
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.
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, I would like to take you around in
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 area if you are interested. Please do not hesitate to request what you would like to see or experience.
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 appreciate it if you could tell me your availability for the small tour. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Mika Yamada

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coherence cohesion
While your letter is mostly clear, the structure can be further improved by explicitly mentioning the points of agreement and disagreement in separate paragraphs for better clarity.
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Consider diversifying your sentence structures a bit more to provide a more engaging read.
coherence cohesion
You have clearly outlined the main points you agree with and those you disagree with, which shows a balanced approach.
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The tone of the letter is polite and suitable for a formal letter to a newspaper editor.
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You have offered a practical solution by inviting the writer for a guided tour, which adds a nice personal touch to your response.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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