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the following maps show the changes in the area of school from 1990 to present

the following maps show the changes in the area of school from 1990 to present
The maps illustrate data about the major
modification
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modifications
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 which have taken place at the
school
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 between 1990 and now. Seen together , the most facts to emerge from the pictures are that the
school
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 has become much more modern with
sport
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sports
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 areas (swimming pool, fitness club) and classroom. Looking at the side of
west
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the west
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, there were
office
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offices
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 and
library
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a library
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 in 1990,
however
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library
Correct article usage
the library
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 has been made away for
Resource
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a Resource
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 computer room,
besides
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car
Correct article usage
the car
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 park has been demolished,
interesting
Correct article usage
the interesting
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 point of
office
Correct article usage
the office
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 has not been altered in a westerly direction. At the up of the map
showed
Verb problem
was
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 a car park, that
has
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had
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 been decorated with
arch
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an arch
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 at present.
Notable
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A notable
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 change has been planted of trees at the
center
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centre
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 of
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school
Correct article usage
the school
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 in 20023. Focusing on
east
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the east
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 side of
area
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the area
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. In 1990, there was three
stage
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stages
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 of
classroom
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the classroom
a classroom
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in
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on
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east
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the east
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 side of
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school
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the school
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, after that that has been extended from 3 blocks to
4blocks
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4 blocks
 at present. Another modification has been the conversion of the farmland into a swimming pool ,
while
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 the adjacent fitness club has been erected in
South
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the South
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.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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