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the following maps show the changes in the area of school from 1990 to present

the following maps show the changes in the area of school from 1990 to present
#maps #show #changes #area #school
The maps illustrate data about the major
modification
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modifications
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 which have taken place at the
school
 between 1990 and now. Seen together , the most facts to emerge from the pictures are that the
school
 has become much more modern with
sport
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sports
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 areas (swimming pool, fitness club) and classroom. Looking at the side of
west
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the west
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, there were
office
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offices
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 and
library
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a library
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 in 1990,
however
library
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the library
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 has been made away for
Resource
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a Resource
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 computer room,
besides
car
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the car
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 park has been demolished,
interesting
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the interesting
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 point of
office
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the office
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 has not been altered in a westerly direction. At the up of the map
showed
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was
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 a car park, that
has
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had
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 been decorated with
arch
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an arch
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 at present.
Notable
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A notable
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 change has been planted of trees at the
center
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centre
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 of
school
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the school
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 in 20023. Focusing on
east
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the east
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 side of
area
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the area
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. In 1990, there was three
stage
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stages
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 of
classroom
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the classroom
a classroom
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in
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on
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east
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the east
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 side of
school
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the school
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, after that that has been extended from 3 blocks to
4blocks
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4 blocks
 at present. Another modification has been the conversion of the farmland into a swimming pool ,
while
 the adjacent fitness club has been erected in
South
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the South
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.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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