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of
Austraylia
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Australian
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in five countries
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, New Zealand,
UK
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,
Germany
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Japan
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between 2004 and 2006.
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, the
Austraylia
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Australia
Australian
students
in five countries all increased slowly. The
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Australia
Australian
students
in
Germany
and
Japan
fluctuated. In 2004 the
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students
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reached
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more than 2500
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and
2006
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the
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students
in
USA
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hit a highest at 2800
students
. Between 2004 and 2006 the
Austraylia
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students
in
USA
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increased
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students
. The
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in
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and New Zealand
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similar. From 2004 to 2005 the
Austraylia
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Australian
students
in New Zealand climbed slightly
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students
and the
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students
in
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Uk
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grew slowly
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students
. Between 2005 to 2006 both
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remained
steady. The
Austraylia
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Australia
Australian
students
in
Germany
and
Japan
fluctuated. In 2004 the
Austraylia
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Australian
students
in
Germany
reached 450
students
and in
Japan
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480
students
. From 2004 to 2005 both had hit a lowest at less than 450
students
. But between 2005 and 2006 both increased.
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