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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outwiegh the disadvantages?

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Some
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researcher
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 have an opinion that it is better for
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 to study foreign
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language
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 at primary schools as it promotes learning abilities and elevates
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personality
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 of
children
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whereas
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foreign
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language
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 will create
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challenges
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devleopment
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development
. First and foremost, If anything is taught to
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furthermore
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develop
.
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Learning
 new things will stimulate their brains.
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,In
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kindergarden
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. so kids adapt to
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 learning easily.
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overall
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challenges
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, if
foreign
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language
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 is taught at
high
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school
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 it can prove detrimental to
learning
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. that will
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challanges
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challenges
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language
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 can not be taught
at
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canada
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, french is taught in
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. The pupils respond very well
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 must be taught any
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primary
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teaching foreign can prove
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advantages
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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