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The graph below showsaverage carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kindom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The graph below showsaverage carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kindom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The line graph depicts
that
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 average CO2 gas emission
each
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of each
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people
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person
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 in Europe countries. The numbers are given in metric tonnes. In brief, Sweden and the UK had significantly reduced
the
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their
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 gas from 1967 to 2007.
Meanwhile
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 Italy and Portugal
had
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constantly increased it
along
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during
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 the period.
It is clear that
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the
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apply
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environmental-friendly countries like the UK and Sweden can decrease one of the
most
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biggest
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problem
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problems
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 in
this
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 world
succesfully
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successfully
.
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, the United Kingdom released CO2 nearly 11 which
the
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was the
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 most quantity of
emission
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emissions
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 but the amount
trend
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trended
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 to decrease constantly until around 9 in 2007.
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, Sweden expressed the gas around 9 in 1967,
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however
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 the emission reached its peak in 1977 by nearly 11. Luckily, it
was
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droped
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dropped
draped
 dramatically after that to approximately 5 in 2007. On the other side, Italy and
Potugal
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Portugal
 have the same movement
along
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over
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 the period of time. In 1967, they emissed CO2 which
around
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was around
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 4 and 1 respectively. Unfortunately, they had
grew
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grown
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 significantly to approximately 8 and 5 respectively. To summarise, even though the UK had a
hugh
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huge
reduce
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 the CO2,
but
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apply
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they
still
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are still
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 the most emissed country in
this
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 group.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words co with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average carbon dioxide emissions
  • CO2 emissions per capita
  • Trends
  • Peaks
  • Fluctuations
  • Plateau
  • Spike
  • Decline
  • Increase
  • Comparison
  • Significant changes
  • Anomalies
  • Time frame
  • Emission trends
  • Environmental impact
  • Sustainable practices
  • Industrial activities
  • Energy consumption
  • Fossil fuels
  • Renewable energy sources
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