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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,
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 developed
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 usually give financial support to
countries
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 which suffer from a lack of money.
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, rich
countries
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 should give another type of aid. I strongly agree with
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 opinion because it can be beneficial for both
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 and it will prevent poor
countries
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 from dying. One of the widely discussed topics nowadays is that most
countries
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 always help financially to poor
countries
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 .
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, highly developed
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want
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 with poor
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 because it can lead to global success. A primary example of
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 is the USA and Canada which are placed close to each other and always support each other.
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, nowadays it is clearly seen that they
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20
countries
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 in the world.
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, recent research showed that over half of
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 achieved success supporting each other at difficult times. Another reason is that if developed
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 continue to aid poor
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 it can prevent a lot of deaths as nowadays public who live in poor
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 suffer from a lack of food. A primary example of
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 is a folk from Africa who suffer from food diminishing.
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, in today's world most
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,
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 as Europe always support various types,
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 as medical resources, money and food. Statistics showed that approximately 40 % of the population of Africa died per year because of a lack of nutrients. In conclusion, a tight-knit relationship between
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 is very benevolent but I think a majority of
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 should concentrate on supporting poor
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.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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