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Plactic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by government and individuals to solve this problem?

#plactic #bags #plastic #bottles #environment #damage #government #individuals
In the
last
 three decades, the rate of consuming
the
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plastic
 stuff has
been
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increased, and effects on nature
badly
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apply
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.
As a consequence
, many kinds of animals have
dead
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by
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 eating bottles and
variety
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 types soils could not be suitable for agriculture
due to
 mixing with
plastic
 parts.
This
 issue must be solved by governments and nations’ aim together. Regarding
to
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increasing
using
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the use of
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plastic
, the rate of
producing
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 it increased. These days, because of
pace
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 of life people do not matter how
many
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 plastics are
consuming
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consume
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 every day, and do not pay attention to
gather
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 it from
environment
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the environment
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 around them.
This
causes
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 the main reason to hurt nature,
specially
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 animals which
lives
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live
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 in
human
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the human
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 field.
For instance
, many
sea birds
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seabirds
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 have died after eating these kinds of
material
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materials
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. Governments in all countries whole the world must prepare laws for producing
plastic
 and make
limitation
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limitations
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 to use them, and nations particularly nation activists should encourage folks to use paper
pocket
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pockets
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instead
 of
the
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plastic
 form.
To sum up
, I strongly believe that if people and governments follow the limitation law can control the problem.
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