The bar chart shows the share of poverty of the rural areas in the years 1993 and 2002. The pie chart shows the rural area share and the urban area share of poverty in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the share of poverty of the rural areas in the years 1993 and 2002. The pie chart shows the rural area share and the urban area share of poverty in 2002.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart gives the percentage of
poverty
in rural areas in 1993 and 2002
whereas
the pie chart describes the rural
area
share and urban
area
share of
poverty
in the
year
2002.
Overal
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, we can understand that East
Asia
and
Pacific
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the Pacific
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region has the most
percent
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percentage
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of
poverty
and Latin America and
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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has the least share in both years. From the bar graph,
it is clear that
East
Asia
and
Pacific
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the Pacific
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region
has
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the a
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higher percentage of
poverty
(90%) in 1993 and 2002,
also
that is
the only region that
has
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had
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no change in both years.
However
, Europe and Central
Asia
had
low
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a low
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poverty
of 50% in 1993, but it increased to 65% by the
year
2002.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, Latin America and
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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has
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had
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almost 50% of
poverty
in 1993, but by the
year
2002
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,2002
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they managed to
decreases
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their
poverty
by 40%. From the pie chart, we can conclude that in 2002 rural
area
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areas
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had a
poverty
ratio of 76%
where
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whereas
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urban
area
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areas
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only had 24%.
Moreover
,
comparing
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compared
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to 1993 all the other rural areas(Middle
east
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East
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and
Noth
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North
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Africa, South
Asia
and Sub-Saharan Africa) managed to decrease their
poverty
percentage even by a little bit by the
year
2002 .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words poverty, area, year, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
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