Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Specialised apparatus has been built by some countries so that rank
athletes
can do their training to achieve global play,
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in those
facilities
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all the masses cannot train. In
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I will discuss both views and
at the end
will give my opinion. To commence with all
sport
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people that are already in the field of business if we provide them with good play furniture
then
they will be able to win major competitions worldwide and the
country
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reputation will
also
increase. To add more into that the apparatus with good equipment the list can perform the international level training. Let's take an example of Brazil in 2007 their
athletes
only won four gold medals but when the proper
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were provided to the same troupe that took part in the Olympics they were able to earn thirty gold medals which is almost thrice the previous. So, I strongly recommend having proper
facilities
for top players is a highly incremental initiative taken by some countries. On the other, if we do not provide
facilities
for everyone it
also
can have detrimental effects. To explain that if we do not provide
facilities
for everyone
then
the
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of sportspeople will decrease in the upcoming decades. Because normally the young ones
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natural talent will get ignored. Like in ,Germany they have divided the
facilities
into two parts one for top
athletes
and one for everyone and if they observe some good tales they encourage them to train with good
athletes
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end there are pros and cons to both, yet I believe that making special
facilities
only for season players is an excellent initiative taken by some countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • specialised facilities
  • train top athletes
  • international sports
  • boost
  • reputation
  • attract
  • sporting events
  • access
  • general public
  • inequality
  • opportunities
  • overemphasis
  • elite sports
  • neglect
  • grassroots development
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