Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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all the masses cannot train. In

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I will discuss both views and

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will give my opinion. To commence with all

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people that are already in the field of business if we provide them with good play furniture

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they will be able to win major competitions worldwide and the

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reputation will

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increase. To add more into that the apparatus with good equipment the list can perform the international level training. Let's take an example of Brazil in 2007 their

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only won four gold medals but when the proper

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were provided to the same troupe that took part in the Olympics they were able to earn thirty gold medals which is almost thrice the previous. So, I strongly recommend having proper

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for top players is a highly incremental initiative taken by some countries. On the other, if we do not provide

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of sportspeople will decrease in the upcoming decades. Because normally the young ones

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natural talent will get ignored. Like in ,Germany they have divided the

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into two parts one for top

athletes

and one for everyone and if they observe some good tales they encourage them to train with good

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end there are pros and cons to both, yet I believe that making special

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only for season players is an excellent initiative taken by some countries.

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specialised facilities
train top athletes
international sports
boost
reputation
attract
sporting events
access
general public
inequality
opportunities
overemphasis
elite sports
neglect
grassroots development

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Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

the first impression you have of a person is the best way to judge a person. do you agree?

some people say that the environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The shortage of housing in big cities can cause severe consequences and only governmental actions can solve the problem. Do you agree views and express your own opinion

Some parents are worried about increasing levels of violence in TV,Video games and other entertainments for Children's leisure. how does this affects the children? how do you think this can be tackled?