You visit a cafe every day. Write a letter to the manager of the cafe. In your letter – Say what you like about the cafe Suggest an improvement to the cafe Explain the benefits of your suggestion

Dear Mr. Brian, I am writing to express my deep satisfaction with the exceptional service and food of your cafe. The Fresh Bites is my favourite spot for not only coffee flavours but
also
I love eating snacks here. Indeed, you have a unique menu for appetisers and professional cooks that's why I crave paneer sandwiches every day. You provide what you promise to customers
for example
, the taste, presentation and freshness of snack never disappoints me. No doubt you provide quality at affordable prices ,
however
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if you could
also
arrange a patio and some nice decoration inside as well outside the cafe
then
it would act as the icing on the cake.
Additionally
, the indoor seating arrangement is fine but it's congested and there is always a crowd at your place.
Also
, trending music in the background is suggested. Undoubtedly, these changes for sure will help you to gain more customers because people like the soft atmosphere with some nice music in the background
while
eating delicious cuisine.
Moreover
, outdoor seating will attract foodstuff lovers who like to eat in natural settings
while
enjoying the outdoors. Most importantly if there is more space
then
of course it will be easy to manage the crowd. I hope you like my suggestions and consider them for the future. Yours Sincerely, Manpreet Kaur
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