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Even when poor countries get help from rich countries, hunger is still an issue. Discuss probable causes and solutions. support your answer with specific reason and example.

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Starvation is one of the problems faced by underdeveloped countries even though they are receiving assistance from developed nations.
This
 essay will focus on the reasons for the above notion and the ways to tackle
this
 issue. To embark on, the first and foremost reason for famine in poor nations is increased population. To be more precise when there is a high number of people there will be a significant number of unemployment,
thus
 they will not be able to manage their livelihood.
For instance
, In India 30% of young people have no job
according to
 the report of the UN, it is because of fewer opportunities
due to
 the increased number of individuals.
In addition
, dwindling interest in agriculture
also
 leads
this
 problem to worse
due to
 the less support from the government,
hence
, they face great challenges in meeting huge expenses needed for crop cultivation.
However
, if the government implements strict laws regarding birth control,
this
 problem can be tackled to an extent.
In addition
 to the rules, they should support the public by providing adequate awareness of family planning in their own languages, where Hindi is the national language but it may not be possible for everyone to understand the brochure or speech in Hindi
therefore
, make them easily understandable.
Also
, authorities should provide subsidies to the agricultural field, it will attract individuals to be involved
due to
this
 financial help,
thus
 hunger can be controlled. To recapitulate, overpopulation and declined interest in cultivation are the main reasons for starvation in poor countries,
this
 can be managed by effective birth control and economic help authorities.
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