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Some college freshmen find that the subjects they choose are not suitable for them. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve the problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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How should
students
 select their
units
 in their first year of university is always a concern.
While
 there are many
students
 who find the
unit
 they choose is not suitable for them. In
this
 essay , I will discuss the reasons behind
this
 phenomenon
as well as
 provide some suggestions to deal with
this
 issue. There are several reasons that cause
freshmen
 not able to find a suitable
unit
 . One of them is not enough information from the
college
.
While
freshmen
 know nearly nothing about the
college
 , they will only choose their
units
 by their names.
For example
 , someone wants to learn something about big data and selects a
unit
 called "big data for business" .
However
,
this
unit
 is a marketing
unit
 and has nothing to do with big data.
Thus
 , with few details from the
college
 , there will be a higher chance of enrolling in a
unit
that is
 not really suitable.
Furthermore
 , most of the
freshmen
 are not used to the cultural differences between high schools to colleges . Without learning about the culture of
college
 life there will be an increasing chance of picking the wrong
units
.
For example
 , high schools have a fixed timetable for all of their
students
 ,
while
 universities are much more flexible.
Students
 have their own responsibilities in choosing their timetable and
units
. In order to deal with
this
 issue , I suggest the
college
 should upload an introductory video to every
unit
. In
this
 case ,
freshmen
 will be able to know details about the
unit
 before they enrol .
Secondly
 , a welcome camp for every freshman should be able to overcome the problem of cultural differences.
For example
 , every second-year student should organise a welcome camp for to
freshmen
 share their experiences and opinions in order to minimize the risk of
freshmen
 choosing the wrong timetable. In conclusion ,
freshmen
 face difficulty in
unit
 choices
due to
 a lack of information and not being used to cultural differences. To deal with
this
 issue , the
college
 can provide details of every
unit
 by editing a video to introduce each
unit
 and organise a welcome camp to let
students
 get used to university life.
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