The younger generation is mainly responsible for the latest technological developments. How far do you agree?

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If you asked me "What is the most popular topic in the world? ", I would say it is technology.
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are really curious about
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what
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next
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the next
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stage will be in
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technological development.
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they are interested in who will keep improving technology. Some critics say
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responsibility belongs to
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the younger
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I don't agree
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idea. When we look at
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last
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the latest
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innovations we will see a lot of
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as
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founders
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who are middle ages.
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why, older
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are important
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the younger
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.
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we should look at the CEOs of tech companies, they are older but not their ideas. These
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always try to find
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new ways
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progress. we can give some
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such
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as Elon Musk Bill Gates. When Elon Musk was
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execuative
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40 years old.
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he was not young he was an ambitious person.
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he continues helping and investing
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in startups
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hand the younger
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has more chances than
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one,
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they cannot use them
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truly
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they don't like to think more about innovation when they are trying to reach something.
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chatgbt
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chatbot
the students use it when they write
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the responsibility
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latest
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tech developments cannot belong to only
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the younger
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generation
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.
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from all age groups can discover new progressive ways
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technology.
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older
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keep supporting young entrepreneurs.
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