Some people say that too much attention and too many resources are given to the protection of wild animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree?

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Today, so many wild
animals
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and birds are on the verge of
extinction
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that we must commit significant attention and money to preserve them.
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, I think we must
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make more efforts to maintain and increase the number of these
animals
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. First of all, one of the primary reasons
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population loss in wild
animals
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and birds is habitat damage, because of the rapid development of industry, the
environment
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has become excessively contaminated in terms of air, water, and land, which not only impacts human health but
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has a direct impact on the living
environment
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of
animals
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.
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, high air pollution generated by emissions from factories and vehicles has impaired the capacity of several bird
species
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to perceive direction and has affected activity performance.
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, unlawful human hunting of
animals
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reduces the number of those creatures dramatically, the goal of those hunters is to exploit the skin, bones or horns of rare
animals
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and sell them at high prices for personal gain. Currently, pangolins are the most trafficked animal in the world and are facing a high risk of
extinction
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, because many people believe that pangolin meat and scales are expensive ingredients used in traditional medicine, the number of pangolin
species
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has decreased significantly and is at an alarming rate
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illegal hunting, which is a highly condemnable act. Admittedly, we are paying a lot of attention and resources to
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wild
animals
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and birds, but
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is still insufficient and many
animals
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are still at risk of
extinction
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because we have not
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the conditions that are adverse to their survival. The
environment
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is heavily polluted today largely
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humans, so the government of each country should be responsible for promoting the implementation of environmental protection projects
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as safely and effectively classifying and treating all types of waste before releasing them into the
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, which will help limit environmental pollution and create a better living
environment
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for
animals
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.
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, in order to maintain ecological balance, governments can cooperate with wildlife protection organizations around the world to create nature reserves with the goal of preserving biodiversity,
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leaders in each country should
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be stricter in declaring bans and enforcing penalties for illegal hunting.
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, unlawful hunting and dealing of pangolins is currently prohibited in many nations throughout the world by the United Nations Convention on the Trade in Endangered
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. In conclusion, the fact that many wild animal and bird
species
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are approaching
extinction
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is mostly
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human
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, so it is critical that we spend more attention and resources
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protecting them,
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is
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a way for us to accept responsibility for the acts we have taken.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • species extinction
  • wildlife conservation
  • sustainable development
  • ecosystem services
  • habitat destruction
  • endangered species
  • conservation efforts
  • natural heritage
  • human encroachment
  • poaching
  • genetic diversity
  • climate change
  • environmental stewardship
  • protection measures
  • wildlife sanctuary
  • biological significance
  • conservation biology
  • environmental advocacy
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