The graph below shows the contribution to different sectors of Indian economy in 1950,1970 and 1990

The graph below shows the contribution to different sectors of Indian economy in 1950,1970 and 1990
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The bar graph indicates how different areas of achievement in the Indian economy changed in three different years in 1950, 1970 and 1990.
Overall
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it can be seen that the personal service division dramatically increased
whereas
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services and agriculture sector significantly declined over the period.
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, the industrial sector experienced fluctuating results over the years. Looking at the job and cultivation branch data sets in detail
it is clear that
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in 1950, the agricultural area was at 35% which was higher than the performance of job sectors accounting for nearly 27%. Both services and farming sections witnessed a plunge over the following year and ended at about 10% and 7.5% respectively. Turning to the self and production branch info sets in more detail it is evident that approximately 7% contribution saw for the personal section in 1950 which rocketed to 37% in 1990.
On the other hand
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, the manufacturing division stood at 20% of the
overall
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performance in the Indian economy in 1950 which jumped to 26% in 1970.
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, the production sector went down to just about 18% in 1990.
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