The diagram below shows the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The diagrams show the life cycle of a species of large
fish
called the salmon that lives in the sea. Before
,
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they are born and grow, their salmon eggs are deposited on the river for about 5-6 months. There are
also
reeds which have the function of protecting eggs from animals, in ,fact they move very slowly. After 4 years, salmon grows enough, their dimensions are about 3-8 cm depending on the
fish
and it is called fry
fish
. They are ready to go in the lower river where we have a fast flowing, here their size is increasing by 12-15 cm and they are called smolt. In conclusion, when they have achieved their maximum dimensions of 70-76 cm can go into the open sea where they find other species of animals,
such
as tonnes and whales.
For instance
,
this
species of
fish
are more good and they are caught by fishermen with boats.
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