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Band 4.5

As water is a valuable resource, governments all over the world should control how much water their citizens use. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Water
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 is the most important element in our life. Ministry of
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water
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 and
enviroment
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environment
 globally have to control how
the
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people
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 consume
water
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. I strongly agree with
this
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 statement.
Firstly
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, the new generation never
realize
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 the importance of
water
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, and there are increasing number of wasted
water
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in
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on
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daily
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a daily
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 basis.
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, a
lot
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 of
people
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leaves
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leave
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 the
water
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 running
while
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 brushing their teeth which wastes a
lot
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 of
water
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everyday
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every day
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.
Moreover
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,
human
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humans
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 take
long
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a long
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 time to shower which
also
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 consider
waste
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a waste
the waste
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 of
water
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.
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, leaking tap that a
lot
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 of
people
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 never realize how much we lose
water
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 from just the issue in the tap.
Secondly
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,
water
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 is very hard to
be
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apply
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control from the government.
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, Even if the ministry increases the payment. My cousin
she
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apply
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pay
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pays
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extra
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an extra
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 bill monthly for the
water
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 that she
have
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has
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 been wasting.
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, she uses a
lot
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 of
water
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 for showering her kids, cleaning the clothes and washing the dishes.
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, she never tried to measure the
water
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 and reduce the consumption.
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, even if the ministry
try
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 to
convice
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convince
people
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 to use less amount of
water
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, still some of the householders will practice the same behaviour.
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, if
water
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 consumption
coudn’t
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can’t
been
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be
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control
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controlled
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, our future will be threatened.
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, the government should have strict rules and
punsh
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punish
 the
people
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 who waste a
lot
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 of
water
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.

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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