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As water is a valuable resource, governments all over the world should control how much water their citizens use. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Water
 is the most important element in our life. Ministry of
water
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Water
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 and
enviroment
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environment
 globally have to control how
the
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apply
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people
 consume
water
. I strongly agree with
this
 statement.
Firstly
, the new generation never
realize
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realizes
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 the importance of
water
, and there are increasing number of wasted
water
in
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on
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daily
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a daily
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 basis.
For example
, a
lot
 of
people
leaves
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leave
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 the
water
 running
while
 brushing their teeth which wastes a
lot
 of
water
everyday
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every day
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.
Moreover
,
human
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humans
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 take
long
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a long
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 time to shower which
also
 consider
waste
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a waste
the waste
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 of
water
.
In addition
, leaking tap that a
lot
 of
people
 never realize how much we lose
water
 from just the issue in the tap.
Secondly
,
water
 is very hard to
be
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apply
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control from the government.
For instance
, Even if the ministry increases the payment. My cousin
she
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apply
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pay
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pays
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extra
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an extra
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 bill monthly for the
water
 that she
have
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has
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 been wasting.
Moreover
, she uses a
lot
 of
water
 for showering her kids, cleaning the clothes and washing the dishes.
Furthermore
, she never tried to measure the
water
 and reduce the consumption.
Therefore
, even if the ministry
try
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tries
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 to
convice
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convince
people
 to use less amount of
water
, still some of the householders will practice the same behaviour.
To sum up
, if
water
 consumption
coudn’t
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can’t
been
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be
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control
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controlled
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, our future will be threatened.
Therefore
, the government should have strict rules and
punsh
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punish
 the
people
 who waste a
lot
 of
water
.
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