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Nowadays the way people relate with each other has changed due to technology Do you think technology has changed people’s relationship towards each other

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It is a fact that the advancement of
technology
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 has changed the way people's relationships with each other. Because of mobile phones, computers and the internet have significantly changed
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 way of relationships.
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 with, in ancient ,time people used to meet each other
face
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 to
face
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 to talk or meet. Since
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technology
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 has made it easy and fast.
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, if someone wants to talk they can simply dial the keypad and call whoever they want.
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, meeting and interview can be done via Zoom by sitting in your own room and does not have to go far from home.
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, teachers can teach their students online in their own rooms.
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, in the old ,times they had to travel far from home to reach school since it was time-consuming and it brings tiredness
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 body so the teacher could not give 100 per cent on their teaching job
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 students had to
face
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 so many problems.
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, because of
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 parents are busy on mobile phones or computers.
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, not having time to talk or share information,
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 take care of their children.
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, nowadays parents are more focused on earning money and they think more money will help their child to have a better life.
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, they can not have enough time for their children to teach them about their traditions and culture and how to
face
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 the real world to survive. In conclusion, yes I think
technology
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 has changed significantly in the way of relationships with each other. Even though technologies are useful in our lives we should control of use in a wise manner.
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, it will help our life not
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