The maps show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 year period from 1980 to 2005.

The maps show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 year period from 1980 to 2005.
The map depicts changes that happened in Youngsville in New Zealand over a
twenty five
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twenty-five
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year period between 1980 and 2005.
Overall
, it is noticeable that in the past
city
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the city
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obtained
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had
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a lack of facilities.
However
, after 25 years it enlarged and became modernized with more places.
To begin
with park, it was extended which is situated on the north-west side of the city.
Therefore
, near
lake
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the lake
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introduced more facilities ,
such
as
boat
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and golf. Another striking change was on the north-east side of the map where houses were removed
instead
of
stadium
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the stadium
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.
Furhermore
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Furthermore
,
second
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a second
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parking was constructed near the stadium.
However
,
railway
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the railway
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station was finished and called Marina.
Moreover
, on the south of the city factories were erected
instead
of trees. In terms of trees and houses on the east-south of the map, they were demolished and skyscrapers were introduced. With regards to
warehouse
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the warehouse
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, it
built
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instead
of trees and others.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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