The maps show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 year period from 1980 to 2005.
The map depicts changes that happened in Youngsville in New Zealand over a
twenty five
year period between 1980 and 2005.
Add a hyphen
twenty-five
Overall
, it is noticeable that in the past Linking Words
city
Correct article usage
the city
obtained
a lack of facilities. Verb problem
had
However
, after 25 years it enlarged and became modernized with more places.
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To begin
with park, it was extended which is situated on the north-west side of the city. Linking Words
Therefore
, near Linking Words
lake
introduced more facilities , Correct article usage
the lake
such
as Linking Words
boat
and golf. Another striking change was on the north-east side of the map where houses were removed Fix the agreement mistake
boats
instead
of Linking Words
stadium
. Add an article
the stadium
Furhermore
, Correct your spelling
Furthermore
second
parking was constructed near the stadium. Correct article usage
a second
However
, Linking Words
railway
station was finished and called Marina.
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the railway
a railway
Moreover
, on the south of the city factories were erected Linking Words
instead
of trees. In terms of trees and houses on the east-south of the map, they were demolished and skyscrapers were introduced.
With regards to Linking Words
warehouse
, it Add an article
the warehouse
a warehouse
built
Add a missing verb
was built
instead
of trees and others.Linking Words
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