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Phychological illnesses may not be as obvious as physical illnesses or disablities, neverthless they are just as disabling in their own way. Society, however, is more accepting of those with physical than phychological illnesses or disablities. The letter being regarded as a 'taboo' subject sometimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often said that the
society
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 favours physical
disabilities
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 over mental
disabilities
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. In short, the world today considers any discussion surrounding mental
health
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 to be a 'taboo'
topic
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. In
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 essay, I will explain the reasons why I completely agree with
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 statement. I agree that people with mental illnesses are heavily judged and discriminated against in
society
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, there is a common misconception about the definition of mental disease. In the past, people with mental
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 issues were considered possessed or crazy and
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 stigma still continues today around the world. Many consider patients of mental
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 to be insane,
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fact
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 it is just a regular disease like that of any other physical
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disabilities
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 in need of medical help.
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, depression is a form of mental illness that requires medication for recovery like any other usual diagnosis requires. Yet, the
society
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 at large refuses to accept psychological diseases as a genuine disease.
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, the world judges those with mental
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 struggles and discriminates against them. To illustrate, an employer will most likely hire someone without any mental
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 issues over a qualified candidate who does.
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 is mostly
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 the fact that they will view mental illnesses as a sign of a weaker mentality over other candidates.
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, the sheer amount of criticism celebrities receive when they speak out about their mental
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 struggles showcases how much
society
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 continues to judge and scrutinize
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topic
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. To summarize, there are various reasons why I agree with the claim that mental
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 issues are considered a taboo
topic
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 in comparison to other
disabilities
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as a result
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 of the aforementioned discussion.
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 includes the large stigma
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topic
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 carries in characterizing someone as mentally ill or weaker than others, which causes them to face major discrimination and insecurity from
society
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task response
Task Response: The essay addresses the prompt and presents a clear argument in agreement with the statement. However, consider providing a balanced view by acknowledging potential counterarguments and offering a more nuanced perspective.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and Cohesion: The introduction and conclusion are well-presented, introducing the topic and providing a summary. The essay is logically structured and supported by relevant examples. To further enhance cohesion, ensure the use of cohesive devices to link ideas and improve paragraph transitions.
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