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Some people believe that culture will be ruined if it is used to earn tourism revenue , but other consider that tourism is the only way of protecting culture.Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Culture
 is the mirror of the country people have different views about
if
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whether
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tourism
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the tourism
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 business truly
preserve
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preserves
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 or
give
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has
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negative
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a negative
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 impact
to
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on
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 the cultures which are developed for
tourism
. In my opinion,
although
 it may cause
negative
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a negative
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affect
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effect
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, it offers more
advatages
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advantages
 in different aspects.
To begin
 with, there is a strong argument that
toursim
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tourism
 is destroying
culture
 for profit. The first factor that cannot be ignored is the tourists. Cultural heritages
which
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represent
for
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the cultures of a country, but visitors come without good awareness.
For instance
, they even have irresponsible behaviours
such
 as littering, drawing or carving on the subjects. In terms of home country, to satisfy
visitor’s
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visitors’
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 demands, food, festivals, costumes and other stimulating of a
culture
 highlighted to attract tourists,
that
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can cause damage to the
unique
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uniqueness
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 of the
culture
.
Moreover
, commercialisation has made people not
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 it
serious
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seriously
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. In
constrast
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contrast
, it is undeniable that
tourism
 brings a lot of positive impacts on
culture
. When tourists visit a destination, they will study
about
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the history, discover
specialties
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specialities
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 and especially enjoy sightseeing. Once they get home, they will share their experience, which
also
 helps to promote that
culture
 and attract more visitors.
Furthermore
, it helps promote economic incentives,
tourism
 industry
develop
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development
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 can
rise
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raise
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 expenditure. Money earned from that can be contributed to
national
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the national
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 budget,
it
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which
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 will satisfy daily necessities which
includes
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include
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 food and accommodation.
Tourism
 is the key to
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the maintainance
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maintainance
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maintenance
 of
culture
. In conclusion, it is difficult to decide whether
tourism
 brings more positive or negative impacts
over
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on
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culture
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cultural
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issue
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issues
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. Government should put cultural preservation on the highest priority because it is
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a longterm
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longterm
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long-term
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 benefit.
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