Some people say that in the modern world, getting old is entirely bad. Others, however, say that life for the elderly nowadays is much better than it was in the past. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. You should write at least 250 words.
Blessings if
describes
Wrong verb form
described
in other words
are the elderly persons living with a family. With the torrid pace of time
the assertion of some people is that growing each day towards seniority has bad circumstances Add a comma
,time
whereas
others do believe that with the passage of time
it has now changed in Add a comma
,time
positive
manner. I strongly Change the article
a positive
belief
that the future Replace the word
believe
is
now Unnecessary verb
apply
have
more Correct subject-verb agreement
has
favorable
conditions for Change the spelling
favourable
seniors
that
will Correct pronoun usage
which
be
Change the verb form
be further discussed
further
discuss in essay
below
Admittedly, the past has Add an article
the essay
a
bad Correct article usage
apply
stories
about the elder’s experiences as they consider the burden on Correct the article-noun agreement
story
family
to some extent because of each passing day the health issues with Add an article
the family
human
body Correct article usage
the human
increases
Correct subject-verb agreement
increase
on
contrary Change preposition
apply
the
level to generate income by doing job or business decreases. Change preposition
to the
Secondly
, the weak government policies
by neglecting the benefits for senior persons put
a drastic impact on Verb problem
had
family’s
Correct article usage
the family’s
budget
. Fix the agreement mistake
budgets
Furthermore
, the lifestyle needs modification with the period of change.
Whereas
now the
Correct article usage
apply
seniors
make effective decisions by experiencing drawbacks from the past and invest in insurance policies
that shields
their future in terms of medical burden, in real estate and other businesses side by side. Change the verb form
shield
Moreover
, they utilize their experiences by starting the
consultancy firms, Correct article usage
apply
actively
Correct word choice
and actively
participate
in social Wrong verb form
participating
NGO’s
by investing their leisure time Change noun form
NGOs
promoting
gardening. Change preposition
in promoting
Besides
that, the role of seniors
is just like a shelter and their life experiences matters
a lot to juniors. Correct subject-verb agreement
matter
Also
, the governments of many countries have modified the policies
in favor
of senior citizens.
To put Change the spelling
favour
in
Correct pronoun usage
it in
to
a nutshell, I pen down by saying that the future of Change preposition
apply
seniors
is now more secure than past because of modifications in government policies
and the change of mentality.Submitted by helma.devina on
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