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the chart below shows the number of houesholds in the us by thier annual income in 2007 , 2011 and 2015

the chart below shows the number of houesholds in the us by thier annual income in 2007 , 2011 and 2015
#houesholds #thier #income
The given bar chart indicates the number of
families
 in the United States by annual salary in three years 2007, 2011, and 2015. It can be said that the
overall
 income of
the
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US
families
 increased in the given years.
Also
, the number of
families
 with annual
salary
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salaries
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 in the range
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of 50000
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50000
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50,000
 to 99999 dollars remained unchanged in the mentioned three years. It can be seen that the yearly
earning
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earnings
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 of households by 100000 or more earning started at 30
million
 in 2007 and
pecked
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peaked
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to
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at
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 about 34
million
 in 2015.
While
, the income of
families
 in the range of 50000 to 74999 and 75000 to 99999 remained constant
about
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 20 and 15
million
, respectively.
In addition
, the number of
families
 who had less than 49999 dollars
income
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in income
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 in 2007 experienced a significant 4
million
 increase in 2011 and
then
 slightly decreased to about 27
million
at the end
 of
period
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the period
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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