Deforestation caused by human activity is happening in many parts of the world, with serious results for the enviroment. What do you think can be done to solve this problem?

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Deforestation
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caused by human activity is happening in many parts of the world, with serious results for the
enviroment
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environment
. Personally, I think that the
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government
can be done to solve
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problem
by
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some ways that I shall explain in more detail in
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To begin
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,
it is clear that
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the environment will be more safe if
deforestation
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is controlled. Nowadays, the
deforestation
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activities of humans which
sever for
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serve
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different purposes increasingly
becomes
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popular all over the world .
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, in my country, Vietnam, several individuals have cut the
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trees
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in forests to earn money illegally. Another case,
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of the increase of the population in the remote areas where local
people
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lack awareness.
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lead
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leads
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to
deforestation
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actions for houses.
Consequently
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, the size of forests more and more
decrease
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decreases
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,
the
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environment
has
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a threat, which
cause
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causes
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many natural disasters
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as blood, drought,
earthquake
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earthquakes
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and so on.
On the other hand
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, the
goverment
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government
should produce force laws to punish those who
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are involved
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demolishing
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in demolishing
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forest
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activities. To illustrate, these years,
Vietnamese
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the Vietnamese
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government has issued the rule that if a person
sales
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sells
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or exploits natural wood illegally, he or she will be imprisoned
up
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for up
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to 50 years.
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to
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law the number of
people
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who
destroys
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destroy
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forests has declined significantly.
Moreover
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, I
belive
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believe
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that
encorage
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encourage
encourages
residents to plant
forest
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trees is
also
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a
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best way to address the problem of
the
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apply
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deforestation
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.
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, in Vietnam, the government has hired local
people
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to plant and take care
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of forest
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forest
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forests
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.
This
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way not only creates more fine jobs for residents but
also
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contribute
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contributes
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to has
expension
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expansion
of
forest
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area. In conclusion, in
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essay, I would like to say that to prevent the
deforestation
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caused by
human
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humans
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from different countries worldwide with serious results for the
enviroment
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environment
the
goverment
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government
should promulgate force laws to limit
deforestation
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pursuits and
encorage
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encourage
local
people
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plant
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to plant
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forest
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trees to enlarge size of
forest
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deforestation
  • reforestation
  • afforestation
  • sustainable
  • eco-friendly
  • indigenous communities
  • logging regulations
  • land use management
  • public awareness
  • international cooperation
  • biodiversity loss
  • carbon footprint
  • habitat destruction
  • renewable resources
  • environmental preservation
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