Some people believe that humans should be able to use animals for their own benefits, while others argue that the rights of animals should be protected. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is a common belief that we should take advantage of
animals
for our personal gain,
while
the rest of the
people
emphasise the safeguarding of animal rights. It is my contention that, even though I am against the violation of
animals
, the community should utilize
animals
in order to improve the quality of life. First of all,
people
who are not prone to exploit
animals
as a nutrition or raw material for clothes think that their rights are violated and
this
is cruel since they feel so much pain and that's why they feel sympathy for innocent lives.
Moreover
, hunting and killing
animals
for only getting profit by marketing them is not acceptable. Because, millions of
animals
are wasted to make luxurious and expensive clothes, shoes or bags based on rich
people
's order.
This
should be restricted to some degree because
such
businesses can lead to the extinction of some species. Let's turn our attention to the opposing viewpoint, which contends that
animals
have been created
due to
the easier and healthier lifestyles of the population.
For instance
,
according to
the Islamic religion, sheep were sent for human consumption as one was sent to the prophet Isaiah to sacrifice.
Furthermore
, there are some kinds of vitamins that can be obtained only from meat or fat which
animals
contain all of them. As human beings are the only creatures in the world with consciousness, we have to take care of our health and are inclined towards extending our lifespan.
To sum up
, even though a minority of
people
consider that
animals
are not to be killed for human needs, I am of the opinion that they have been created to balance nature and provide nutrition for human beings
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal rights
  • exploitation
  • ethical considerations
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem balance
  • animal welfare
  • suffering
  • humane treatment
  • medical research
  • environmental sustainability
  • natural food chain
  • technological alternatives
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