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In some area of the us, a "curfew" is imposed, In which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at the night unless they are accompanied by an adult.What is your opinion about this?

#area #curfew #teenagers #doors #time #night #adult
Most
of
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governments used to impose a "curfew"at the
emergancy
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emergency
 situations.
In here
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youngersters
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younger people
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 are not
accepted
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 to go outside in specific given
time
 periods without
guidance
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 of the elder people.
As
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 my view, I strongly believe , hometime is the one of proper
method
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 and low for protecting
young
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the young
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genaration
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generation
 and
safe
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the safety
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 of the
nation
.
Firstly
, the government and responsible authorities have enormous responsibilities to secure the citizen
,
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and
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the insfrastructures
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insfrastructures
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infrastructures
infrastructure
 of any
nation
.The
teenages
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teenagers
 are the most significant group ,which is inclined to conflicts dramatically
due to
this
 reason the national guards tend to eliminate these specific
group
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groups
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 of people from root causes.
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 ,
the
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 massive number of killings
were
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occured
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occurred
at
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the
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1988-1989 in Sri Lanka.As
the
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 result of that,young lives
lost
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were lost
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 to the mother
nation
.If
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the SriLankan
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SriLankan
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Sri Lankan
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goverment
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government
 could control
youngers
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youngsters
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 from root causes by applying restriction
time
 periods in
this
 era,
this
 devastation would not
be happened
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.
Secondly
,the state governments have undeniable to ensure
education
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the education
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 of the future generation,and it is
a
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one
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of
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huge
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the huge
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piller
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pillar
 of national development.
Therefore
,the national defence authorities used to introduce specific
time
 limits at the chaoses to minimize the failures of education systems.
For example
,
fightings
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 could
be
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lead to
education
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faliures
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failures
,and there are
many
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number of
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countries
such
 as
libeya
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Libya
,
Afganistan
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and Afganistan
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,which are suffering
with
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 civil war
while
 destroying educational
faliures
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failures
.
Hence
,curfew is the root
causes
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cause
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 for
choses
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choices
,and it
ensure
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 the young lives. In conclusion,
stete
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state
 agencies have vital responsibilities to protect
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the law
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law
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laws
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 and regulations of the
nation
 by
ensureing
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ensuring
 the normal
life styles
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lifestyles
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 of citizens.
Therefore
,
homestay
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a homestay
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time
schdule
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schedule
 is paramount to protect
the
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adolescent people.
Nevertheless
, without proper planning ,it is impossible to maintain
curfew
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a curfew
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 positively.
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