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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Introduction
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Internet
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The Internet
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 is more popular among all
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generations of
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society. Because
currently
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,currently
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 it is the
most
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fastest method of
communication
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. Blog
sites
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, social media and
lot
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a lot
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 of
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web
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websites
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sites
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provides
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provide
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 instant updates on every
topics
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topic
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 of
news
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.
Also
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 nowadays everyone has a mobile phone and they can easily connect to those
web
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 site when they
needed
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need
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. These
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web
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websites
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sites
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variety
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 of programmes with video and audio formats.
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 caused to attract more
people
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 to these
from
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form
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 of
communication
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. Even
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news
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newspapers
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papers
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also
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 now started their
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web
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websites
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sites
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 to publish
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news
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newspapers
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papers
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an
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e-version.
Body paragraph 1
When we consider
about
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apply
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paper
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news
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newspapers
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papers
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,
this
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 form of
communication
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 now becoming
un popular
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unpopular
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 due the the difficulty of reaching
people
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compare
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compared
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 to digital media.
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But
still
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 some
people
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form
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from
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old
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older
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 generations used to read
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news
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newspapers
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papers
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.
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 is because
of
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their knowledge
on
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of
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 digital media is still
in
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at
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lower
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a lower
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 level.
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Otherwise
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 they will
also
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 like to use e-
news
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papers
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.
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But when we compare
these two format
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this two format
these two formats
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 of
communication
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 there are some issues on
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web
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websites
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sites
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also
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too
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. Because the validity of
a
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news
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 can be wrong. On some
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web
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websites
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sites
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,sites
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 they publish fake
news
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 because of various reasons. They can continue
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,
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 because they don't have much ethics
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compared
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 to the
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news
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newspapers
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papers
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.
Conclusion
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as
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I think
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the internet
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internet
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 now
play
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plays
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 a huge role
on
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in
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communication
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 than
the
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apply
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news
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newspapers
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papers
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. Because of the way
news
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 can
be reach
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be reached
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 to
people
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 is better on
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internet
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the internet
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 than
nws
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news
papers
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. When
news
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papers
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comes
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come
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 a
news
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 with
a
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apply
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photos and letters, in
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internet
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 can reach
people
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 with videos
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apply
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also
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. They can read
a
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the
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news
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as
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apply
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live

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