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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Internet
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 is more popular among all
the
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generations of
the
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society. Because
currently
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,currently
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 it is the
most
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fastest method of
communication
. Blog
sites
, social media and
lot
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a lot
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 of
web
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websites
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sites
provides
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provide
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 instant updates on every
topics
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 of
news
.
Also
 nowadays everyone has a mobile phone and they can easily connect to those
web
 site when they
needed
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need
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. These
web
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websites
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sites
 provide
variety
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a variety
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 of programmes with video and audio formats.
This
 caused to attract more
people
 to these
from
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form
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 of
communication
. Even
news
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newspapers
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papers
also
 now started their
web
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websites
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sites
 to publish
news
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newspapers
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papers
 as
an
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e-version. When we consider
about
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apply
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paper
news
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newspapers
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papers
,
this
 form of
communication
 now becoming
un popular
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unpopular
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 due the the difficulty of reaching
people
compare
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compared
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 to digital media. But
still
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,still
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 some
people
form
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from
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old
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older
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 generations used to read
news
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newspapers
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papers
.
This
 is because
of
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their knowledge
on
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of
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 digital media is still
in
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at
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lower
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a lower
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 level.
Otherwise
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,Otherwise
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 they will
also
 like to use e-
news
papers
. But when we compare
these two format
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this two format
these two formats
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 of
communication
 there are some issues on
web
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websites
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sites
also
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too
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. Because the validity of
a
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news
 can be wrong. On some
web
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websites
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sites
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,sites
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 they publish fake
news
 because of various reasons. They can continue
this
,
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 because they don't have much ethics
compare
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compared
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 to the
news
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newspapers
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papers
. In summary,
as
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I think
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the internet
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internet
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 now
play
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plays
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 a huge role
on
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in
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communication
 than
the
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apply
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news
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newspapers
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papers
. Because of the way
news
 can
be reach
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be reached
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 to
people
 is better on
internet
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the internet
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 than
nws
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news
papers
. When
news
papers
comes
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come
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 a
news
 with
a
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photos and letters, in
internet
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 can reach
people
 with videos
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apply
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also
. They can read
a
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the
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news
as
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apply
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live
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