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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. Governments could better spend this money on other things to benefit the nation. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

#minutes #topic #money #space #exploration #waste #governments #benefit #nation
Now every
countries
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country is
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 trying to explore
the
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apply
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space. For
these
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this mission
these missions
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mission
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,mission
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 they are spending huge
amount
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amounts
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 of money
for
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on
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 these
projects
. Now their target
to
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is to
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crate
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create
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 a human colony on the Mass.
Lot
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A lot
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 of rich countries spend
ton
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tons
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 of money
of
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on
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 these
projects
 to maintain
pride
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the pride
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 of their countries. When I consider
about
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apply
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these
projects
, I can see both good facts and bad facts
on
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about
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 these
missions
.
Let
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Let's
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 check the good side first. For these
missions
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,missions
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 they
trying
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try
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 to do some experiments.
This
 caused
to
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us to
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 find new tech items and new technologies for our daily
life
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lives
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.
For example
, robotic usage for
the
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apply
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treatments in hospitals now become popular. Robotic technology
use
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is used
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 to complete some surgeries due difficulty of completion by a human.
Also
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,Also
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 new apps, some machines and vehicles can
see
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be seen
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 on
market
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the market
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due to
results
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the results
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 of these
missions
. But when we look for the bad side of these
missions
, 1st thing is the higher cost for these
projects
. Most of the
times
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time
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 these
missions
are getting
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apply
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fail
due to
 various reasons.
This
cause
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causes
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 to waste
billions
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of billions
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 of dollars
could
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that could
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 be used for another good project. In
summary
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,summary
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 these
missions
giving
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give
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 us mixed results.
Government
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The government
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 should spend people's money for
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