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Young people are often influenced in their behaviours by others in the same age group. Some argue that peer pressure is important while others feel it has distinct disadvantages. Do the disadvantages of peer pressure outweigh the advantages?

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Youngsters normally have similar behaviours as peers of their age. Advocates are of the opinion that the influence of the same
group
 is vital
whereas
 proponents assume it has unique drawbacks. I strongly vote for disadvantages
due to
 the negative impact of
this
group
 on young
people
 and the elimination of youngsters’ identities.
Firstly
, peer
pressure
 on the young generation might have negative effects.
In other words
, young
people
 may force each other to have the same behaviours
such
 as smoking cigarettes which exacerbate their personality.
Moreover
, they might try to do some illegal activities which completely destroy their life.
Secondly
, the young nation will lose their true identity under the
pressure
 of their peer. To clarify, youngster have their personality which is unique but when they are under
pressure
 they will lose their passion for life and try to do the exact activities like as other
people
 in their age.
For instance
, Iranian young
people
 who are really talented in music prefer to follow other young generations around the world because they are under
pressure
.
Also
, the advantages of
this
 notion are irrefutable that will explain. Some proponents assume that the effect of
this
group
 of
people
 can increase their tendency in order to build better lives for themselves, not only they can be really helpful to each other, but
also
 they influence each other to take action in some cases.
However
this
 they just overlooked and they did not pay attention to the negative
pressure
 of
this
group
 of
people
 on each other. In conclusion, genially youngers are influenced by their peer in their behaviours. Some proponents have
this
 assumption that
this
 effect is important for their lives
while
 others believe that it may have a negative impact on them. I firmly hold the view that the disadvantages of
this
 notion outweigh the advantages.
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