Friends and family bring more happiness than money and possessions. How far do you agree with this statement?

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Nowadays, more and more people question the sources of
happiness
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. Some argue that money and
possessions
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make life more joyful,
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others believe that a person's inner circle is the key to
happiness
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. In my opinion, family and
friends
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play the central role in bringing
happiness
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to one's life. (49)
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with,
happiness
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often stems from shared moments and
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,
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as laughter with
friends
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in a café, supporting one another within a family, or collaborating
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a team of professionals working on a unique project. These
experiences
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create lasting memories and strengthen bonds between individuals, bonds that can be preserved over the years.
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, a genuine
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of
happiness
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emerges.
On the other hand
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, money and
possessions
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generate only fleeting emotions.
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, they lack the enduring impact and emotional depth that real interactions with others possess. Ultimately, spending time with family and engaging in shared activities with
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create
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of shared
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that can
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for years,
whereas
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possessions
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,
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as houses and cars, create only temporary, vivid emotions that cannot endure for decades. (129) At the same time, the absence of negative emotions
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as loneliness and isolation is essential for
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.
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is why interacting with those around us is crucial. Having a strong network of
friends
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and family fosters a
sense
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of community and strengthens connections with others.
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, money and
possessions
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, when not accompanied by meaningful social interactions, cannot provide
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sense
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of unity.
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, studies have shown that individuals with strong social ties tend to enjoy better mental health,
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constant striving for material wealth often leads to stress, anxiety, and a
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of emptiness. After all, engaging with one's inner circle helps to prevent loneliness and isolation
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the pursuit of material wealth does not offer
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benefit. (120) In conclusion,
happiness
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is primarily rooted in shared
experiences
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and strong social connections.
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material wealth may provide temporary pleasure, it is the bonds with family and
friends
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, and the
sense
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of community, shared memories and social well-being they bring, that lead to lasting
happiness
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.
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task response
Ensure a balanced discussion when presenting both sides of the argument, even if you strongly support one side. This strengthens the depth of discussion and provides a fairer perspective.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of cohesive devices to enhance the flow between ideas and paragraphs, although currently, the structure is well-organized.
task response
The essay provides a clear and comprehensive response to the prompt, effectively detailing why personal relationships bring more happiness than material wealth.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure is maintained throughout the essay, with a clear division of introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, each flowing smoothly to the next.
coherence cohesion
Main points are consistently supported with relevant examples and clear explanations, enhancing the depth and credibility of the argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Emotional well-being
  • Intrinsic value
  • Meaningful activities
  • Diminishing returns
  • Temporary pleasure
  • Psychological needs
  • Long-term satisfaction
  • Interdependence
  • Community and belonging
  • Supportive relationships
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