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It is wrongly believed that films only corrupt us but the fact is that they can also educate us. Do you agree or disagree?

There are many who assume that
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. I completely disagree with
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 statement. In
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 essay, I will present the reasons why I differ and argue the notion that in fact,
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 can be highly educational. The first primary reason why I believe that a movie can be educational is because of the morals they may present. Good
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 will have excellent storytelling with valuable messages for their
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 to learn. Even critical films with violence or harm
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 as the 2019 released 'Joker', portray pressing social issues that need questioning. A mature film requires a mature
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 to understand it.
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 is why
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 are often rated so that the
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 knows which age group can correctly identify with the
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' themes and
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, prevent any minds from being wrongfully influenced. The fact that cinemas are essentially a form of storytelling is another reason why I believe they are educational. Whether the characters were written in a book or filmed in a visual medium- the purpose in either of the cases is to ultimately tell a story. In my opinion,
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 are much easier to understand and quicker to finish in comparison to a book. To illustrate, my teacher showed our religious studies class "Minority Report' in school to understand complex subjects like free will and destiny.
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, cinematic visuals certainly help the brain to capture emotions or concepts more easily than others.
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,
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 it may be easy to see how
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 may have the power to wrongly influence their
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; I think they are the best source of education if utilized correctly. Rather than scrutinizing
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 wonderful art form, I think it will be better to criticize the actions of the public
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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