IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6

In today’s education, a popular phenomenon is the encouragement of young high school students to take a gap year, either to work or travel, before applying to a university.

#today’s #education #phenomenon #encouragement #school #students #gap #year #work #travel #university
In today’s education, a popular phenomenon is the encouragement of young high school students to take a chasm period, either to work or travel, before applying to
academy
Add an article
the academy
show examples
.
This
 trend has been growing over the years and one question is asked all the time: Is it a good idea to take a disparity
year
? Taking a different
year
 has many benefits for a high school graduate depending on his or her choice of what to do during the term. Applying for a job,
for example
, can let the student undercover their interests and skills which can allow them to choose the right major for themself when applying to college.
On the other hand
, travelling to another place not only will increase their knowledge about different cultures and people, but
also
 let them relieve all of the stress they had from the exams and complications during the graduation
year
.
Additionally
, these decisions will play an essential role in student’s development for educational institution life. Despite all of the pros, taking a period off before applying to
a
Change the article
an
show examples
 educational institution
also
 has its drawbacks. There is a possibility that young people might get caught in bad habits that might extinguish their interest in education.
Moreover
, there’s a low chance that students will study any subjects during the gap
year
, resulting in initial difficulties with a particular course during the first
year
 of college. Unfortunately, students might get distracted from the main aim of the gap
year
 and spend their time on something useless for their academic journey.
Overall
, I think that the break moment that’s taken after graduation should be spent on something important and beneficial for a student’s future. In fact, taking a break between high school and the academy is a very good decision, because it can boost the student’s interest in the major they are planning to apply to.
Submitted by samilking2007 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: