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In today’s education, a popular phenomenon is the encouragement of young high school students to take a gap year, either to work or travel, before applying to a university.

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In today’s education, a popular phenomenon is the encouragement of young high school students to take a chasm period, either to work or travel, before applying to
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 trend has been growing over the years and one question is asked all the time: Is it a good idea to take a disparity
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? Taking a different
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 has many benefits for a high school graduate depending on his or her choice of what to do during the term. Applying for a job,
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, can let the student undercover their interests and skills which can allow them to choose the right major for themself when applying to college.
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, travelling to another place not only will increase their knowledge about different cultures and people, but
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 let them relieve all of the stress they had from the exams and complications during the graduation
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, these decisions will play an essential role in student’s development for educational institution life. Despite all of the pros, taking a period off before applying to
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 has its drawbacks. There is a possibility that young people might get caught in bad habits that might extinguish their interest in education.
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, there’s a low chance that students will study any subjects during the gap
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, resulting in initial difficulties with a particular course during the first
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 of college. Unfortunately, students might get distracted from the main aim of the gap
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 and spend their time on something useless for their academic journey.
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, I think that the break moment that’s taken after graduation should be spent on something important and beneficial for a student’s future. In fact, taking a break between high school and the academy is a very good decision, because it can boost the student’s interest in the major they are planning to apply to.
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