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Most people do not care enough about the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is argued that our natural habitat is not taken care of adequately.
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 essay agrees with
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 statement because ,
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 the habit of over-consuming leads to environmental destruction;
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 producing non-biodegradable waste harms
animals
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 and plants. Nowadays many people have chosen a lifestyle that requires consuming unnecessary products which are made from natural resources,
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result
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 these resources
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 as jungles and oceans are being damaged, and the
animals
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 living there are being killed for their furs, teeth or skin .
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,cosmetics that are made from natural extracts and advertised by social media influencers are massively purchased by consumers without paying attention to the cost that
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 fabricating process causes.
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, the decomposable waste
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 produced by humans puts the majority of species' lives at risk. Chemical materials
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 as plastic, can remain for more than 50 years in the environment and
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 issue should be concerning because they not only make forests or cities ugly but
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 contaminate the
animals
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' habitat.
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, chewing gums are one of the threatening human wastes that can be a cause of birds' death, if it is swallowed by them. In conclusion,
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 the earth is being neglected for the following reasons; destroying the green areas and seas in order to produce pointless materials , and disposing of unwanted goods that can not be easily broken down in nature which jeopardizes
animals
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' health. In my opinion, It is advisable for governments to discourage habits that cause harm to the environment and invest in companies that manufacture goods which are environment-friendly.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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