These days, people tend to change many jobs during their lifetime. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?

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and
due to
that many individuals
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however
positive effects are much higher than negative and
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will elucidate my views in both terms
To begin
with , everything in today's time is getting so expensive and
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that it is difficult for a
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person
to keep pace with that so that leads to frustration and anger .
Whereas
more
jobs
are available in today's time because of science and technology . So,
due to
all of these
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individual wants to
change
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profession . To elaborate
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further
, changing
profession
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professions
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may help
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individuals
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in earning
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more as
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new
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companies
provide better wages
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,
person
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may feel more secure in
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proffesion
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profession
due to
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work
environment which used to be lacking in
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proffesion
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profession
.
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new
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may
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some
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additional services
also
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for
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instance
, home security , food , or health insurance .
Hence
, it is good to
change
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profession
professions
for
better
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a better
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life experience. To demonstrate
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so
change
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of
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profession
may
also
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to some demerits like lack of stability , toxic
work
environment,
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. To explicit it
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person
may feel the
work
environment more chaotic and hectic
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which
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will make it difficult for
individual
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the individual
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to do their job and even lack of supportive
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may
also
contribute
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this
so
this
will make
person
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more impatient nd individual again try to find
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nee job . To
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an example , A survey
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conducted
on
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2022 in
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it
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revealed that
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40 per cent
of people face issues when
change
their
jobs
. As a
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result
changing
proffesion
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professions
can negatively
effect
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affect
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the
person
.
To conclude
, it is true that
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changing profession
proffesion
may have some
demetits
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demerits
but the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. So , I opine that
person
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a person
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should
change
jobs
to lead a financially stable life.
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