These days, people tend to change many jobs during their lifetime. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?

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enormous impact on
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and
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that many individuals
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their
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during their lifetime . I believe that
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method has both positive and negative
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however
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positive effects are much higher than negative and
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will elucidate my views in both terms
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with , everything in today's time is getting so expensive and
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that it is difficult for a
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person
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to keep pace with that so that leads to frustration and anger .
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more
jobs
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are available in today's time because of science and technology . So,
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all of these
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individual wants to
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profession . To elaborate
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further
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, changing
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professions
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may help
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in earning
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more as
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new
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companies
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good incentives .
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,
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person
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a person
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may feel more secure in
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proffesion
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profession
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work
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environment which used to be lacking in
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their previous
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proffesion
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profession
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these
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new
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may
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provide
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some
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additional services
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also
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for
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instance
, home security , food , or health insurance .
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, it is good to
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proffession
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profession
professions
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life experience. To demonstrate
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so
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of
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profession
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to some demerits like lack of stability , toxic
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environment,
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work load
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. To explicit it
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person
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may feel the
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environment more chaotic and hectic
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this
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will make it difficult for
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the individual
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to do their job and even lack of supportive
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may
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contribute
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so
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person
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a person
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more impatient nd individual again try to find
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nee job . To
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conducted
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it
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revealed that
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40 per cent
of people face issues when
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their
jobs
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. As a
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result
changing
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proffesion
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professions
can negatively
effect
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affect
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the
person
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.
To conclude
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, it is true that
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changing profession
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may have some
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demerits
but the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. So , I opine that
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person
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a person
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should
change
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jobs
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to lead a financially stable life.
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