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In the furture, buses, cars and trucks will be driveless. The only people travelling inside will be passengers. Do you think tha advantages driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the cutting-edge era, many innovations lead improvement of technologies, especially in
transportation
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.
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, in the future, inventions, namely buses, cars, and lorries, will be automatically moved without drivers. In
this
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 case, people argue that it
leads
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 beneficial for humans;
however
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, the rest think that technology has some
drawbacks
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. To respond
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this
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 issue, I agree that it creates more positive impact than the negative sides. Turning to the
drawbacks
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,
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the driverless vehicles creates
the
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 negative impact on the social and the economy.
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,
increasing
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the increasing
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 number of automatic
transportation
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 contributes high spread of social strata in
life
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 because the rich with a fortune can afford to utilize the hottie
transportation
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while
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 the poor can not.
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, the higher
spread
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the spread
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 of social status, the greater
crime
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the crime
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 will happen.
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, the economic aspect generates the decreasing purchasing power of citizen since the machine replaces the human role in their
life
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,
although
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 applying non-driver
transportation
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 has many
drawbacks
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, it still has
so
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many good
impact
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to
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on
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 human
life
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. As regards beneficial aspects,
traveling
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travelling
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 by driverless machine creates more efficient and effective
in
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human
life
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. The reason is people do not need to pay a driver in a regular month so that it will reduce overhead costs in their lives.
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, it lowers the probability of accidents caused by human errors since in the data of public
transportation
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 reports, the top of the accident problem was generated by it. To recapitulate,
instead
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 of the invention of technology,
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 as applying non-driver
transportation
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 triggers
drawbacks
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 on social and economic sides, the beneficial impacts create essential aspects of human
life
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, especially effective and efficient points.
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