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In the furture, buses, cars and trucks will be driveless. The only people travelling inside will be passengers. Do you think tha advantages driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the cutting-edge era, many innovations lead improvement of technologies, especially in
transportation
.
Moreover
, in the future, inventions, namely buses, cars, and lorries, will be automatically moved without drivers. In
this
 case, people argue that it
leads
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 beneficial for humans;
however
, the rest think that technology has some
drawbacks
. To respond
this
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 issue, I agree that it creates more positive impact than the negative sides. Turning to the
drawbacks
,
emerging
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the driverless vehicles creates
the
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 negative impact on the social and the economy.
Firstly
,
increasing
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the increasing
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 number of automatic
transportation
 contributes high spread of social strata in
life
 because the rich with a fortune can afford to utilize the hottie
transportation
while
 the poor can not.
In addition
, the higher
spread
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 of social status, the greater
crime
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 will happen.
Secondly
, the economic aspect generates the decreasing purchasing power of citizen since the machine replaces the human role in their
life
.
Therefore
,
although
 applying non-driver
transportation
 has many
drawbacks
, it still has
so
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many good
impact
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to
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on
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 human
life
. As regards beneficial aspects,
traveling
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travelling
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 by driverless machine creates more efficient and effective
in
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human
life
. The reason is people do not need to pay a driver in a regular month so that it will reduce overhead costs in their lives.
On the other hand
, it lowers the probability of accidents caused by human errors since in the data of public
transportation
 reports, the top of the accident problem was generated by it. To recapitulate,
instead
 of the invention of technology,
such
 as applying non-driver
transportation
 triggers
drawbacks
 on social and economic sides, the beneficial impacts create essential aspects of human
life
, especially effective and efficient points.
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